The red, black and white aesthetic was very detailed and thorough, which was effectual. The different dotting of the different inks was comprehensive and added a visual texture to the performance, especially when text was written over them. It was enjoyable to have the written text being a part of the performance. The multitude of cranes in different sizes and placed very strategically around the space was well constructed; I can imagine this being extended to a whole room of cranes. The table was useful to create the height of the cranes, especially towering above the performer.

 

It would have been interesting to see more movement in the performer’s body and interaction with the objects present on stage. Sometimes, there seemed to be a slight disconnect between the performer and the objects, especially the cranes. Maybe there could be clarification between the text and images.

 

The tone used to deliver the text was effective as it was not over performed or acted and the repetition worked. Playing with the pace of text was effective, especially getting faster and it added energy to the performance. Though, it would maybe be more effective if the text was broken up more and sounds were elongated. I feel the text can be estranged, as it is such a prevalent stage element.

 

The audience positioning around the taped border was effective. It made the performer seem vulnerable against the surveillance of the audience. This was apparent when the audience was moving around the border, in contrast to the stillness of the performer. The white tape could read as the performer being part of a gallery installation, or a safe space for the performer with the mini cranes guarding the performer.

 

The performer’s body position was held for the duration of the performance, but there was some movement and I felt when the stillness physicality contrasted the spoken text, this was most effective.

The presence of breath as sound in addition to the spoken text was effective. It grounded the piece and made the performer very present onstage. This also seemed to link to weight, through the control of the breath. It made the performance engaging and linked the text and stillness of the piece.

 

Being able to have moments of silence from the performer made the piece interesting. It made the background noise of people moving and softly talking

 

Within the performance, there was a distinct presence of weight, a heavy human body surrounded by light paper. The hanging birds from the table particularly emphasized this, they were so light that they might fly away but also tethered. As they were face height when the audience were seated, the birds moved when audience breath, again highlighting their weight. The presence of weight would be an interesting dynamic to play with, through the objects and their movement.

 

The stage positioning of the objects and the performer meant the audience could engage and interact with different levels and proxemics to view the performance, which was effective.

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When different audience members were taking pictures around the border, their screens showed a different perspective every time. This was effective as it highlighted the detail of the aesthetic choices. Maybe using cameras could heighten these hidden and different perspectives, or the audience members are encouraged to seek them out by using different height levels.